Blog Prompt #4 (10/2)

The four papers linked to below are student research papers. Download, print and read them. Using the Department of English Goals and Objectives for writing, assess each paper and be prepared to discuss your assessment. It might help for you to know that the assignment asked students to develop an argument on a specific topic. The argument was to be about 1,500 to 2,000 words and documented in proper MLA format.

Rubric and Outcomes

WRITING OUTCOMES: In the composition sequence of ENGL 101 and ENGL 102, students will demonstrate the following skills in written communication:

  • Clarity of Purpose: Students will demonstrate the ability to establish a clear purpose (thesis or announced intent) and an appropriate awareness of audience (reader).
  • Quality of Thought: Students will demonstrate a level of rational thought that recognizes and examines complexity of ideas and is supported by credible and logical evidence.
  • Organization of Content: Students will demonstrate unity and coherence, and demonstrate effective arrangement of content, all in the appropriate support of purpose.
  • Synthesis and Integration of Sources: Students will demonstrate effective synthesis of multiple sources so that various claims, findings, and arguments are clearly and concisely presented.
  • Attribution and Documentation of Sources: Students will demonstrate accurate citations in text and in works cited / references so that readers can clearly identify and track purposeful use of source materials.
  • Language and Style: Students will demonstrate the ability to make stylistic choices in vocabulary, diction, and syntax.
  • Grammar and Mechanics: Students will demonstrate competence in grammar, usage, punctuation, and spelling

Successful responses to this Blog Prompt will identify specific strengths and weaknesses in each sample paper using the writing outcomes as defined above and the even more specific description found in your syllabus.

Paper #1

“Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

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Paper #2

“The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

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Paper #3

“Food and You Researched Argument”

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49 comments for “Blog Prompt #4 (10/2)

  1. Mikayla Morales
    October 1, 2018 at 1:50 am

    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A+
    Explanation: Paper 1 is very well written and fully embraced the complexity of the issue and the claims were all supported by logical evidence. The writer of this paper used citations throughout the paper to show where the evidence was coming from and that it was legitimate. The organization of the paper was clear and the reader could read the paper effortlessly and without any confusion. The writers writing skills were well developed and they are exemplified throughout the paper, such as diction, sentence structure, and grammar. Although the thesis sentence could have been more in depth, I believe the effort put into this paper exemplifies A+ work. 
    Paper #2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean” 
    Grade: B
    Explanation: Paper 2 was well written and showed few mistakes throughout. The writer did support most of the claims with logical evidence, although not all of the claims seemed to be effective. The writer did make the paper and thesis correspond, although I believe the thesis sentence could have been more in depth. The organization was clear for the most part, but most of the information could have been written with more detail. The reader might have some confusion while reading this paper because not all of the paragraphs seem to be completely on focus. For the most part, the grammar is correct, but the sentence level could improve. I believe this paper deserved a B. 
    Paper #3: “Food and You Researched Argument” 
    Grade: D 
    Explanation: I feel like this paper was more opinionated than researched. There is not a lot of logical information throughout the paper, it is more based off of the writers opinion. The paper did not have any in-text citations, so it is unclear where the information was coming from. The paper is not very organized and it is not structured properly. Many of the paragraphs are written incorrectly or are in the wrong format. The writing skills exemplified in this paper are minimal and most of the information is unclear. The thesis sentence seems to be missing or is just extremely unclear. I believe this paper deserved a D. 

    • Melvin Mckie
      October 2, 2018 at 3:50 am

      Paper #1“Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”Grade: AExplanation: I gave this paper a “A” because it was very understanding an everything was right on point, I did’t get off topic or nothing of that sort, an it didn’t confuse me at all. The thesis statement was very written  correctly an easy to find in the paper.  They put a lot of effort an take there time an research the topic. It was very organized, an all the facts an explanation were very detailed an right to the point. The arguments were back up for very well in this paper.

      Paper #2“The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”Grade: BExplanation:I think this paper should get a B because the thesis statement was a little clean, but the introduction was okay to me. At the begin I like the way he use creative to make a little story to make me understand what he going to talk about in the paper. I also think that some of the paragraphs were’t really on the topic towards the thesis statement to me. The facts an explanation were okay as well, but more focused on the topic.

      Paper #3“Food and You Researched Argument”Grade: DExplanation: The last paper I gave it a D because I could’t really understand what they were talking about. The thesis statement could of been better but easy to find . Some of the paragraphs were confusing , I felt like the facts an explanations weren’t really understanding , an didn’t really support what they were talking. Overall i felt like he should have put more effort an did more research.

       

       

  2. Darrell Parker Lilly
    October 1, 2018 at 11:52 am

    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: its a very well written paper all the way throughout. It focuses on the issues very well and never seems to stray off topic. It has all the necessary tools to be a very well written paper such as clarity of purpose; this is shown by the writer never staying to far from the original topic. She also took and used many resources to back up what she was saying and that helped git the point across. And finally her content was very organized and easy to read it felt like it flowed well this is why I feel it deserves at least an A.

    Paper 2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B to B+

    Explanation:I feel this paper was definitely good and well thought out but it was missing a few things. It was close to being as good as the first one but I feel there where just things missing. I agree with Mikayla, I feel it was well thought out but the writer did stray from time to time and some detail I feel was missing from some of the paragraphs. it wad definitely a good paper with little or no mistakes so I do feel it deserves a high B to B+.

    Paper 3:  “Food and You Researched Argument” 

    Grade: C

    Explanation: Again not as good at the second and decently not as good as the first. It rambles a lot and I feel they didn’t get there point across effectively.  the grammar skills exhibited in this paper are not very good it definitely needs to be looked over again. there isn’t clarity of thought all the time and is  just missing clarity of purpose. It wasn’t a terrible paper there was some effort put in and I could follow what it was getting for so that is why I would give it a solid C but nothing higher.

     

  3. Kendra Zavala
    October 1, 2018 at 1:45 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation:
     The paper is very well written and it is evident that the writer did heavy research on the topic. The author used logical evidence and stayed on topic during the entire paper. Not only did the author include statistics in her writing, she incorporated state laws that would prevent or help the states from having a cleaner city. The author also allowed her paper to flow together by using transitional sentences. The only problem with the paper is that the conclusion is weak and does not back up her thesis sentence well. With this paper having minor mistakes, it deserves an A.
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B or C
    Explanation:
     The introduction is eye catching, and includes a lot of information, but the information is not backed up with evidence. It is unknown where the information is coming from and what the source is. It seems that the thesis sentence for South Carolina to issue a bill for plastic bottles, but there is not enough information to back up her argument in her paper. The author uses information from many sources throughout her paper to back up what she is saying; however she fails to stay on topic during her paper. I agree with both Daryl and Mikayla that it is confusing to follow the paper.

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
    Explanation: From the start, the paper does not have an eye catching title or introduction sentence. The grammar in the paper is very poor and it cites one source (properly) throughout the entire paper. The author fails to back up information in their paper and is trying to use “logic” to explain his paper. The author is also using personal opinions to justify his reasoning, and not facts.

  4. Estefania Fuentes
    October 1, 2018 at 2:11 pm

    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A+

    This essay was a very well-developed essay. Overall, student demonstrated thoughts clearly. The research done was valid and accurate. The thesis statement was clean, and it was well organized. Organization was clean, and it was effective argument. The language used was also very educated, and the essay was overall formal. All the evidence used was backed up with reasonable evidence.

    Paper #2: “The Plastic Soup we call Ocean”

    Grade: B

    This essay was overall, well written and the thoughts and points went across. However, it was missing more analysis. There was lots of evidence and the research was presented clearly, it was the lack of developing the evidence into analysis. The thesis was clear as well, and it was organized in a organized way.

    Paper #3: “Food and You Research Argument”

    Grade: D

    This essay from the start seemed a little unorganized. Just at first glance, it was not in MLA format. The first thing I noticed was the title and how it made no sense. Reading through the essay, there was no clear evidence, and the thesis did not compare to the essay. Overall, this was not a good organized or thought about essay, it seemed very last minute.

     

  5. Adeline Folland
    October 1, 2018 at 2:41 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: Super good! Her thesis is spot on, she knew exactly what she was arguing for and how she was going to prove her point. She cited her sources correctly and would be easily found in the spot she provided.  Her essay was organized nicely enough to where it flowed which made it easy to read and very understandable.

     
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: Very nice hook. I was particularly impressed with her sixth paragraph where she introduced the other viewpoint but used logistics to prove how her argument would be more effective. But because of her occasionally slipping off topic or jumping around I am forced to drop it from an ‘A’. Although her citations are done nicely, she could have used better sources or better information from those sources to backup her claim.

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
     
    Explanation: In his argumentative essay he uses “I” a lot in the first paragraph which is already a BIG NO! The paper is very biased and doesn’t have much research or logistics behind it. His paragraphs are fairly short also, specifically the 3rd, 4th, and 5th paragraphs. He also has a weird one sentence ‘paragraph’ that could have been incorporated into the next paragraph or the previous one. His works cited page is also incorrect. He didn’t cite it in the MLA format, or any format. He just stuck the websites or titles on a page and called it a day.
     

  6. Ithzel Contreras
    October 1, 2018 at 2:47 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: Paper # 1 Is a well written paper, the writer focuses on the topic and never talks about anything else. The author uses the right amount of citations throughout the paper, to prove his or her point. The organization of the paper was clear, so it was easier for the reader to read it without getting confused. The writing skills of the author were good. It had a good grammar, punctuation and spelling. At the end of the paper the Author provides the information of the citations made throughout the paper. The student derives an A because I believe it was a great paper, although the thesis sentence could have been better.
     
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: Paper #2 is a good paper, you can see the writer took its time writing it, but I feel the author could change the thesis and make it a little better. Throughout the paper there were a few mistakes. I agree with Mikayla and Darrell; the writer could have written the information with more detail. The reader might get confused throughout the paper because some paragraphs weren’t completely focus on the subject. Overall, this was a good paper but somethings could be improved. I believe that this paper deserves a B.
     
    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
    Explanation: Paper #3 is based more in the opinion of the writer and not on the “researched” information. I agree with Darrell, I feel like the author didn’t get the point across effectively. The grammar in this paper is not really good. I think the writer did out effort on this paper, but he or she didn’t do what the assignment asked them to do, and just for that I feel like the writer should re-write the paper. I believe the writer deserves a D with what he or she has now, but if the paper is re-write it could get a better grade.

  7. Tyler Gallman
    October 1, 2018 at 3:25 pm

    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: I believe this paper deserved an A due to the fact of its very well put together structure. The writer of this paper made the topic clear and gave great incite onto their reasoning and context. Her citing also made it very clear. This paper also fit the criteria for which the paper was to be written on to its full extent.

    Paper #2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B

    Explanation: I feel as though this paper deserves a letter grade of around B. The paper relatively well put together. I did find some minor grammatical errors. I found that the information used appeared to be helpful and guided me to my understanding of the paper. The vocabulary was not quite to the extent of the first essay.

    Paper #3: “Food and You Research Argument”

    Grade: D

    Explanation: This paper seemed to not have much structure. This essay was also a bit difficult to read due to the lack of structure and guidance.  As I began going through it, I noticed that it did not consist of many facts or evidence to back the statements made. I felt the argument was not terrible but it was not put together well nor was It advanced.

  8. Brandon Hoover
    October 1, 2018 at 5:14 pm

    Paper #1 “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: This paper was well written and it was very easy to follow along and understand what the paper was talking about. The claims were well thought out and written clearly and the logical appeals had lots of supporting evidence. The works citied showed that the writer took their time and used ample evidence to back up their claims and make it more reliable. The organization of the paper was clear and as a reader had a nice flow to go along with and understand. I felt that the thesis sentence could have been better but it was still good but could be developed more.

    Paper #2 “The Plastic Soup We Can Call Ocean”

    Grade: B-

    Explanation: This paper was also well written but a lot more mistakes were made throughout this paper than paper number one. The writer did support his evidence but didn’t use all of it effectively and the claims didn’t flow as well. The sentences could have had better structure to them and used for detail. The flow of the paper wasn’t the best, had some confusion when reading it. Taking more time out to re-read the paper and put a little more time and effort into it, could fix grammar mistakes and help create a better flow of the paper.

    Paper #3 “Food and You Research Argument”

    Grade: D-

    Explanation: This paper didn’t use many claims and didn’t use evidence to back up what he was talking about. So I felt like the paper was more based off his knowledge and what he felt like was right. The paper didn’t have a good flow and had many grammar mistakes. Also, the paper didn’t use the correct format that it was supposed to be set up in. I didn’t find a thesis sentence and if it was there it wasn’t very well written and didn’t support what the paper was talking about. The paper just didn’t have much effort put into it, no in-text citations and just poorly written. The writer should have taken more time and put more time in and thought out sentences better to create a well developed argument and paper.

  9. Cindy Lin
    October 1, 2018 at 6:52 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability of South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A/A+
    Explanation: This paper was very well written from start to finish.  It was very organized and it was easy to follow and it flowed very well.  You can tell the person took their time to do research to get their point across because there were many sources included in their writing to back up her point.  The person focused on the points they were trying to get across, used a lot of evidence, and did not seem to stray away from the main focus of each paragraph.  Although the entire paper was very well written, the conclusion seemed to be weak.  If the person spent some more time on the paper, they could have improved the conclusion.  Overall, this paper was clear and easy to follow.
    Paper#2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: The paper was well written.  It had an eye-catching title and introductory sentence.  There was a lot of sources used to back up what she was trying to get across but the person could have added some more details in some paragraphs.  Although the paper was well written, it did not seem to flow very well.  It did seem a bit confusing while reading it as some of the paragraphs seem to have gotten off topic.  If the person spent some more time on the paper, they could have improved the flow of it and made it more clear and easy to follow.
    Paper #3
    “Food and Your Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
    Explanation: From the start, the paper seemed more like an opinion based paper than a research paper.  The title and the introduction was not very eye-catching and there was not a thesis sentence or it was unclear. Although the person did give a few good points throughout the paper, they did not have enough information to back up their argument with.  The paper did not seem to flow well, since there were some grammatical errors and the paragraphs were not formatted well enough.  It jumped from talking about USCA’s food to different dieting plans/ideas and back to USCA’s option on meal plans.  The paper seemed like it was rushed or either written last minute.  The work cited were not done correctly except for one or two

  10. Ave’ Parker
    October 1, 2018 at 7:13 pm

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    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A+

    Explanation: Overall this is a very great paper. This paper was well written, and it had a lot of quotes to back up what they were talking about. This paper also used many resources to back up what she was saying and that helped git the point across. It was organized well with great structure and grammar.

    Paper 2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B+

    Explanation:

    I feel this paper was good, but it was missing a few things and had a few mistakes. This writer supported most of their claims, they could’ve gone deeper with this being a research paper. This writer definitely got my attention from the beginning. It had a very nice hook. This writer didn’t use as many sources as paper 1 but, it still had some.

    Paper 3: “Food and You Researched Argument”

    Grade: C

    Explanation:

    This rambles a lot and I feel they didn’t get there point across effectively.  This paper is based off of opinions and not facts or research. The grammar skills exhibited in this paper are not very good. This kind of seems like the writer wrote this last minute. It isn’t a terrible paper there was some effort, just should be rewritten and the assignment should be followed a little bit better. They also couldv’e had more sources and quotes.  

  11. Mika Alday
    October 1, 2018 at 7:30 pm

    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: The paper was well written, and it exhibited formality and coherence. The student established the purpose of the argument clearly and presented credible and logical evidences to support his/her argument. He/she used several evidences such as city laws, environmental policies, article references, and citations from the student’s source materials to support his/her argument effectively. The student also demonstrated his/her ideas in a well-structured arrangement, which produced a nice transition from one idea to another. Furthermore, the paper showcased the student’s vocabulary and diction, and competence in grammar and mechanics.
     
    Paper #2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B to C+
    Explanation: In comparison to the first paper, this paper was written as if the author was talking to its audience in a casual way. Despite using a mix of first and third person point of view, the student established his/her purpose clearly and presented evidences that adequately support his/her argument. The student presented evidences, but he/she did not utilize the source materials well enough to produce a strong and effective argument. In addition, the paper did not demonstrate an effective arrangement of content and ideas; some paragraphs deviated from its focus. The paper also had a few errors, and it displayed language and vocabulary limits.

    Paper #3: “Food and You Research Argument”
    Grade: F
    Explanation: The paper was more of an opinion-based paper than a research argument. The student did not establish his/her intent clearly, and the ideas were not balanced. He/she also presented evidences, but it was not credible and logical enough to support his/her argument. The paper lacked an organized structure, which flawed the overall unity and coherence of the content, making the parts poorly connected. The student not only displayed poor choices in vocabulary and diction, but he/she also showed poor grammar and mechanics. Furthermore, the source materials were not used and cited correctly, and the student ended up using his/her opinions to justify the argument. 

  12. Coral Crittenden
    October 1, 2018 at 7:43 pm

     
    Paper 1 – “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
     
    Grade – A
     
    Explanation – I found this paper to be extremely well done. The reference page was correct, the formatting on the first page (including header) is correct and their argument is clear. They have a strong thesis statement, and throughout the whole paper they have well developed evidence, and when it needs to be cited, it’s done correctly. In every writing outcome they have every category achieved. My one negative comment is the sentences occasionally were rather short, when I think they could have been comprised into multiple point sentences to flow better. Besides that, grammar is great, and they wrote a strong paper.
     
     
     
    Paper 2 – “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
     
    Grade – B
     
    Explanation – This paper was well, but not great. It deserves a B, but not any higher for the issues it has. It’s front page formatting is wrong, due to the missing header and either professor or class description at the top left. I personally say it doesn’t open strong, and it fails to cite a source for the information presented mid paragraph. From there though it has strong arguments, strong paragraphs and appropriate citing. The reference page is done correctly, but the conclusion is a tad weak, including a sentence that should be taken out. For this I gave it a B.
     
     
     
    Paper 3 – “Food and You Research Argument”
     
    Grade – C-
     
    Explanation – The formatting is wrong, along with the reference page. Another issue is the first page header and top left information boxes are missing. Regarding the reference page, it looks as if there was no effort inputted at all, and that can generally be said for the rest of the paper as well. There are a massive amount of grammatical errors, words missing from sentences, and several inputs that don’t make sense. Despite this, they get a C- rather than a D because they cite correctly (because they do it via the sentence), and their paper is a little lengthy, bringing up evidence to back up their argument. It isn’t done too well though, with opinions running wild, and terrible structure, resulting in a low C.

  13. Gabbi Hayes
    October 1, 2018 at 7:57 pm

    Paper #1 “Impediment of Sustainability of South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: This paper was written in a very well manor. The organization and clarity of purpose was outstanding. It was very hard to really find or point out any errors in this paper. The writer did  great job with staying on topic throughout the entire paper. They also provided very reliable examples, which were correctly cited, which means they provide great evidence. Also, the outline and the overall structure of the paper was very eloquent. There was also great use of grammar, spelling, the sentence structure was good, meaning there were no run-on or incomplete sentences. Overall, the paper was very well organized, which earned the paper an A.

    Paper #2 “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B+

    Explanation: The starting of the introduction is very creative to catch the readers’ attention. There was also a good usage of grammar and vocabulary in the introduction. I got a clear representation of what the topic is in this paper, which is how plastic pollution is effecting the oceans and what needs to be done for it to be stopped. The writer expresses that by adding examples and facts which are cited with the page numbers from the book. I think the thesis sentence was very legitimate. The sentences made sense, it’s very clear for the readers to understand what the writer is trying to interpret. Although, there was a lot of supporting claims and examples, the writer didn’t stay on topic throughout the paper, which brought the grade down to a B+.

    Paper #3 “Food and Your Researched Argument”

    Grade: C-

    Explanation: While reading the beginning of the introduction, I noticed some minor grammar errors. The paper was kind of biased and opinionated without much stated facts or examples. The writer does express the topic with details, but not credible details. Although there weren’t many stated facts, the writer does go about the topic in a very descriptive, referring to how the food has been the same and adding in the previous years. I read a sentence that might be the thesis statement and if it is, it needs a lot more description or detail. I believe this paper deserves a C-.

  14. Taylor Brown
    October 1, 2018 at 8:01 pm

    Paper 1-  “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A/A+

    Explanation- Paper 1 used good valid sources that was quoted through out the paper. The paper was very organized and straight forward; which shows that time and dedication was put forth in writing it. This paper was based mostly off of logical appeals; which is why it has so many sources cited. The paper had a pretty good thesis statement and the clarity and of the paper was really well defined. The paper also used good vocabulary and sentence structure.

     

    Paper 2-“The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade-B-/C+

    Explanation- The paper thesis sentence isn’t very strong but the paper is tied to it. Some parts of the paper was hard to follow which means the paper needed to be revised for more clarity. I also think the paper had good points within it but didn’t have enough of supporting details. The vocabulary of the paper could have been better but it was very concise throughout.

    Paper 3-“Food and You Research Argument”

    Grade-D+/D-

    Explanation-You can tell that the paper had low quality work. The paper looked like it was done at the last minute.The paper had a very It also was more opinion based than fact based. The paper lost focus throughout it. There were also grammar issues and sentence structure problems.The sources were not cited correctly.

    Looking through the comments you can see that mostly everybody agreed with a few discrepancies. Most students pulled out similar mistakes and why that paper got that grade. I disagree with Ave’ Parker with her grade C for paper 3 because she gave the paper the benefit of the doubt. She said that the paper had some effort.

  15. James Jackson
    October 1, 2018 at 8:02 pm

    Paper #1
     
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
     
    Grade: A-
     
    Explanation: Paper 1 overall Is a good well put together paper, It stays on topic with no run-ons. It was well organized, and the writer also cited their sources. I just felt that the paper was very boring and uninteresting; I also dreaded to finish the paper, and that Is why I didn’t grade It an A or A+.
     

     

     
    Paper #2
     
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
     
    Grade: B+
     
    Explanation: I loved this paper the most out of all of the other papers, I feel like I can relate to this type of writer; I write very similar to the writer. I really liked the hook of the paper, It caught my attention and made me really want to read the paper. The paper was very interesting and didn’t leave me bored or day dreaming. The only problems I see with this paper Is the multiple times where they didn’t cite correctly, but other than that, It was a phenomenal paper.
     

     

     
    Paper #3
     
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
     
    Grade: D-
     
    Explanation: I would give this paper a D- ,because how can you write a research paper with no research or evidence. The writer never cites any articles or books which makes me wonder If anything they’re saying Is credible or If they plagiarized their paper. The writer doesn’t uses commas correctly and used comma splices multiple times.
     

     

  16. Benjamin Jollie
    October 1, 2018 at 8:19 pm

     
    Paper #1
     
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
     
    Grade: A
     
    Explanation: This was a very well written paper. I found very few mistakes throughout. The thesis is clearly stated, explained and supported with proper evidence. Overall, the paper flowed very well.
     
     
     
    Paper #2
     
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
     
    Grade: B
     
    Explanation: I feel like this paper could have gone into more detail talking about the supporting evidence. I think this was a good paper, but I think the writer could have done better listing where the sources for the different claims were found.
     
     
     
     
     
    Paper #3
     
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
     
    Grade: D
     
    Explanation: This paper was all over the place, it felt like there was no structure to the way it was laid out. There was almost no evidence to support what the writer was saying, and the little evidence there was not documented in proper MLA format.
     

  17. Jada Lee
    October 1, 2018 at 8:54 pm

    Paper #1 

    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government” 

    Grade: B+ 

    Explanation: The flow and organization of the paper was done well. The thesis statement gave a good generalization of what was going to be talked about. The reason I gave the paper a B+ was primarily dueto the few grammatical and spelling errors I saw throughout the paper. I also saw an incorrect change between past and present tense. Overall, the writer stayed on topic and included relevant sources to support the claims.  

      

     

    Paper #2 

    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean” 

    Grade: B or C+ 

    Explanation: The hook and thesis statement both fulfilled their intended purposes. However, the paper was somewhat scattered and off topic in some areas. There could have been more sources included throughout the paper to show more factual proof to back up the claims. Finally, there was a fair amount of grammatical errors and unclear sentences that contributed to the occasional confusion I had while reading the paper. Like Mikayla said, the sentence level could improve. Therefore, I feel the grade for this paper is somewhere between a low B and a high C. 

      

      

    Paper #3 

    “Food and You Researched Argument” 

    Grade: D 

    Explanation: The paper lacked structure, organization, and overall cohesion. There wereextremely few citations and sources included throughout the paper. Each paragraph contained sentence and grammar errors, and many of the sentences did not make sense. The paper was less about researched facts and more about personal opinions. I agree with Ithzel that the best way to fix the paper is to rewrite it to make it an actual research paper rather than an opinion paper. This paper should get a D because the author missed the entire point of a research paper and had an excessive amount of sentence errors.

  18. Madison C. Ayers
    October 1, 2018 at 8:56 pm

     
    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: In paper #1 was a very well written paper, the write talked about the topic and never got distracted. The thesis might have been able to better written but other than that the writer had plenty of evidence throughout the paper to get his point across. They really thought out how to organize the paper and the paper really flowed. They used strong vocabulary and amazing grammar. This student deserves an A because to me the paper was amazing and hit every key point.
     

    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: This paper was okay. The author struggled on the thesis, had some grammar mistakes and there wasn’t much detail about the topic. The writer didn’t focus on one thing through out the paper because it was all over the place. I feel as if they were to go back and reread it and just proof read it they could make a better grade but other that it deserves a B.
     

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: F
    Explanation: Paper #3 was pretty bad. To me is didn’t make sense and I think more opinionated that it was research. The writers grammar was pretty bad and It seems like they did this the night before and never proof read it. They didn’t really focus on what the author wanted and they just need to completely rewrite it.
     

  19. Shamerius Mack
    October 1, 2018 at 9:20 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade:A
    Explanation:Throughout the text the student does a great job presenting the evidence from their sources, they properly site sources, and clearly states the thesis in the introduction and in the conclusion. The student also does a good job reversing a less interesting topic into a topic that students can somewhat relate to. Overall, the student does a great job other than the minor errors found.

    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade:B
    Explanation: The student does a great job organizing the text, introducing the topic clearly and strays on topic, includes very detailed paragraphs, transitional words, explains how and why, and  presents an interesting form to relate to readers. However, the student’s writing could be improved by improving their vocabulary, citing the author along with the quotes, and reducing the amount of questions asked throughout the writing.

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade:D-
    Explanation: The student performed very poorly in this writing as he did not use MLA format, cite his sources correctly, and did not include a visible thesis. The student also has many grammatical errors throughout the text with an unorganized format and the use of “you” which should not be used in academic writing. Overall, the student performed very poorly, however they did include a broad vocabulary.

  20. Evan Condon
    October 1, 2018 at 9:57 pm

    Paper Number 1:

    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: The writer of this paper wrote a very good paper in my opinion. The writer was very well informed of the topic that they were writing about as they used many good sources to back up their topic and provide very good and complete information. Grammatically the essay was on point and the citations throughout the essay were done correctly. They had a well structured paper that allowed the essay to flow from one point to another and kept the reader involved as it did not stray from the main topic. I think that the overall paper was very well written and formatted and that it deserved an A.

    Paper number 2:

    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B

    Explanation: To start with this paper, the writer could have used a stronger thesis statement. Along with the thesis statement, the writer had trouble grammatically and had a tough time providing good evidence from the sources that they used which made it tough to really support their claim throughout the paper. Grammatically, the sentence level and overall grammar level could use some improving upon. I agree with what Mika said as well that the paper did not demonstrate the best arrangement of content and ideas. For all of these reasons I believe that this paper deserves a B/B-.

    Paper number 3:

    “Food and You Researched Argument”

    Grade: D

    Explanation: To start, throughout the whole paper, the writer did not use proper formatting. The writer struggled to provide evidence for their claim as their argument/claim was not clear. It appeared that the writer did very little to prepare for this paper as they wrote the paper with many opinions and not enough research points. Grammatically, there are a lot of errors and the structure of the paper is all over the place. I believe that this paper deserves a D for all of these reasons.

  21. Madalyn Shaver
    October 1, 2018 at 9:59 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: The paper was well written throughout. It was organized well which made the paper easy to follow and read. All of the points made were backed up with evidence, allowing the reader to feel the information is credible. Unfortunately, the conclusion was very weak. Although, I do not feel the lack of a solid conclusion took away any of the importance from the paper.
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: The introduction was very interesting and enjoyable, she made it relatable which was fun. However, her language and style, specifically the word choice and vocabulary, was a little weak throughout the essay entirely. Her purpose of writing was clearly to explain how plastic is a problem to fish. Her clarity of purpose was good as well as organization of content as she kept her essay specific to her thesis. She quickly began citing sources. All her sources seemed to be relevant. Her conclusion was a strong wrap up to an overall good paper.
     Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D-
    Explanation: The introduction was very specific to him only, which might make for a tough argument. The attribution and documentation of source is extremely low as well as synthesis and interaction of sources. As the essay continues it seems the paragraphs get weaker and weaker. The language and style was mediocre. I am not sure the requirements of this specific papers, however it is written very opinionated which is okay, but nothing seems to really be supported by facts. There is no counter argument as well. The conclusion did not make the paper any better.

  22. Jasna L Gerou
    October 1, 2018 at 10:58 pm

    Paper 1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: B+/A-

    Explanation: I think the paper was very well written and the author exhibited great comprehension of the topic. There weren’t many issues with the overall flow of the paper. Though, at times I did catch myself getting a bit confused with a few sentences. The research was thorough and valid, making the arguments clear and effective. Every argument was explained and backed with accurate evidence. A few grammatical errors but the student portrays valiant effort. The Language of the paper was at a higher but understandable level. Citations were used properly, although I wish they would have used more of their own words instead of mainly paraphrasing. I would give this paper a B+ or A- because of the few grammatical errors and my wish to read more of their own words.

     

    Paper 2: “The Plastic Soup We Call the Ocean”

    Grade: C

    Explanation: Personally, this paper didn’t do it for me.  The topic and the author’s standpoint were clear but, the grammar and overall structure of their sentences were o.k. I was a bit confused on some of the terms I hadn’t heard of before. Citations were used properly and well. The effort was shown but not quite as much as the first paper. This one is definitely C work.

     

    Paper 3: “Food and You Research Argument”

    Grade: F+

    Explanation: The topic clearly wasn’t researched, there was little to no effort showed and there’s zero evidence. There was one citation improperly cited, no flow between sentences and paragraphs. It felt as if the author wrote this essay two hours before it was due. Sentence structure and grammar was very poor. I could sit here and explain the poorness of this essay but, and F+ would suffice.

  23. Marcus Edgington
    October 1, 2018 at 11:43 pm

    Paper #1 “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A+
    Explanation: The author used many sources to back their research and used correct in-text citations for all sources. The paper also keeps to topic stated and does not wander on about nonessential ideas or topics. The author kept on a one tracked mind when setting up the paper Their use of punctuation was fine as well as their use of grammar. I felt that words were not repeated and that the paper had a great flow to it.  

    Paper #2 “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B/B+
    Explanation: In this paper the student did not add page numbers to the top right corner of the page. Besides this the paper was good it had a few mistakes such as using in-text citations wrong as well as jumping from one thought to another thought without any explanation to why. I feel if the student said, “as previously stated…” the logical order would make sense. To clearly get the point across this paper is structured well and has a good flow.     

    Paper #3 “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D-
    Explanation: The last paper did not show any use of page numbering such as the 2nd paper. This paper had bad grammar and punctuation usage. The paper did not contain any in-text citations and could be seen as purely opinion-based facts. The paper’s work cited page is entirely wrong. The layout of the paragraphs is choppy at best and are pretty hard to follow as the paper tends to move off topic and begin another idea in the midst of the late stated idea.

  24. Hannah Gunter
    October 1, 2018 at 11:51 pm

    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: The paper was very well written and organized. The thesis statement was easy to pick out and gave a brief and good explanation of what the paper was going to be about. The author of this paper used a lot of quotations from the book meaning that they had good evidence to back up their point. There were very few mistakes found.

    Paper #2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B – C

    Explanation: The introduction was very interesting and their thesis statement was clear. The language she used was okay, some of it was a little confusing and difficult to understand. The author did, at some points, get off topic. The structure and the overall layout was okay. I found a few grammatical errors. A good thing the author did was the use of information found in their source they did quote it correctly and had lots of information.

    Paper#3: “Food and You Research Argument”

    Grade: D – F

    Explanation: I feel like this paper is strictly opinion and not the researched topic. They didn’t use a lot of quotes from sources. The formatting, grammar, and citations are all formatted wrong. I agree with other students that this paper should be totally rewritten because there are so many errors. I also agree with another student that the topic of the research paper was totally missed.

  25. Kitten Johnson
    October 2, 2018 at 12:06 am

    Paper #1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”Grade: B+Explanation: I gave this paper an A because it goes well into detail about the topic. this person used many transition words and citations proved that some type of research was done. The writer could have made the writing a little more exciting because while reading the paper i found myself getting tired of reading it. The thesis was a little off, but other than that the writer had plenty of evidence shown. Very few mistakes were shown and the writer talked about examples explaining what the topic was about. The paper stayed on topic and there were also few spelling errors. I also liked that the paper was neat and had structure. 

    Paper #2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean” Grade: C+Explanation:I would give this paper a B+ because it stayed on topic about what is happening to the fish when we throw away plastic, but the paper is a little plain. i liked the introduction and it was somewhat free of errors. The writer provided citations which has shown that more than one resource was used. I believe with a little more time and thinking the thesis statement could have been a little more in depth. Although the writer had facts about what the topic was about, it was a little all over the place. 

    Paper #3: “Food and You Researched Argument” Grade: D-Explanation: I would give this paper a D- because immediately I saw errors. No evidence supported the topic what so ever. This wasn’t so much a research paper but more of an opinion, which you wouldn’t have to use research for. MLA format was terrible and I’m not sure what this writer’s thesis statement is. 

     

     

  26. Caleb Fairchild
    October 2, 2018 at 12:29 am

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation:This paper has a strong and clear purpose from the very begging. It has a great thesis, but the thesis fails to go in-depth enough. Rational thought arguments are implemented throughout the paper and make very good points. Of course, the writer backs up all of these claims with quotes and facts. This paper has a good three points, but they aren’t very well intoduced. This means that one would need to examine the paper closely to recognize these points. The writer doesn’t fail to use many different sources from many different places. The writer completely and correctly cites their statements from the book and other source.The language in this paper was very high level with little to no grammar mistakes. This paper was very smooth to read and was very sophisticated, but it’s points were not very clearly expressed. This leads me to say that this paper deserves a low-A.
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: Paper two was a well thought out paper. It’s purpose was somewhat difficult to follow, but it’s thesis was clear and well said. Most of the writer’s arguments were supported to rationalization by the writer and scientific data through outside sources. The thesis did not outline the paper. This made it difficult to know what to expect next. The writer consistently brings in different sources to support their argumeng throughout the paper. The writer also accurately cites all of her claims in the book correctly. Although she did not put “pg” for page. The writer also used first person and the word “we” several times. This is inappropriate language to use in a formal paper.  The writer of the paper also had many grammatical errors in the introduction paragraph. This paper was coherent, didn’t have many obvious mistakes, and had a good purpose to it so I believe it deseyrves a B.

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade:D+
    Explanation: The writer’s thesis was definitely not clear and was not in depth. The writer was able to to make claims that were backed up with some level of rational thought, but the writer ended up repeating themselves multiple times just to get their point across. This paper severely lacked structure and coherence. It’s points were randomly placed in amongst her paragraphs which seemed to have no points. The writer was able to back up the claims which he made with quotes and book references. There were no book citations anywhere thoughtout the paper. The writer used his own personal stories and the word “I” for to much for a formal paper. The paper was also littered with many grammar mistakes and verb-noun disagreements. This paper was very messy with many grammar and organizational mistakes, but it did make a few notable points and had an overall purpose which each of its paragraphs seemed to follow to an extent. To me, this means that this paper should earn au D+.

  27. Annalee McDaniel
    October 2, 2018 at 12:45 am

    Paper #1

    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: Throughout paper 1 the writer is able to show their understanding of the chapter by including many details and examples. All of these are well supported by references from the chapter. You can tell the writer know what they are talking about and they give a clear understanding of what is going on through the chapter. The writer set the paper up nicely so the reader could go from one paragraph to the other with smooth transitions. The writer does a great job with grammar and sentence structure and organization. One thing the writer could have worked on is giving some example in their thesis sentence for what they wanted us to get out of it. Overall this paper was pretty great and I believe it was an A paper.

    Paper #2

    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B

    Explanation: Throughout paper 2 the writer is able to show their understanding of how pollution is causing an effect on the ocean and on the things we eat. They also talk and go into detail about how not only is this harmful to ocean life but to us as well. The writer supports their claims with evidence from multiple sources throughout the paper. The writer does a good job when organizing their paragraphs and their sentences using transitions words and proper grammar. There were times when they could have chosen other words to up the sentences but overall the paper was written well and deserved a B.

    Paper #3

    “Food and You Researched Argument”

    Grade: D

    Explanation: To start off paper 3 the writer did not use proper grammar or have any kind of sentence structure. They really didn’t have a thesis sentence, it was more of what they thought should happen and not what the reader should get out the paper. They talked more about what they think and really don’t include anything from other sources. Towards the end, they start throwing in sources but there’s really no organization or structure. While reading it feels like you’re jumping from one topic to the next it doesn’t really flow. If the writer was to go back and revives I would suggest trying to have more organization and to remove some of the “I thinks” from the paper that’s why I give this a D.

  28. Virginia Quarles
    October 2, 2018 at 12:53 am

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: B+
    Explanation: This paper shows a clear purpose of arguing that South Carolina lawmakers favor economic gains rather than supporting environmental awareness. The paper had good flow and contained claims which supported the argument. The writer also gives the reader a perspective from electric companies as a counter argument. Sources are relevant throughout the paper and used effectively. To be critical, on the third page, “saving 3,000 jobs” seemed unnecessary and was not explained after stated. On page four, the first full paragraph was well written but the topic sentence could be adjusted. The writer focused on companies against environmentally friendly polices in the topic sentence yet discussed bans on plastic bags for the majority of the paragraph.  
     Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: C+
    Explanation: I thought the introduction was great because the writer used an emotional appeal. The story about fish potentially causing the writer to become sick was effective in catching my attention and putting myself in his/her shoes. In the first paragraph, the sentence, “These pollutants, or chemicals…”, confused me and I had to read over it multiple times to understand it. “Pollutants, or” should be deleted for the sentence to make sense and so points are deducted because of that. I thought the paper was organized and flowed well for the most part. The last sentences of the paragraphs, whether it be the introduction, body, or conclusion paragraph were the best written and I thought summed up the thoughts well. There were a few grammatical errors. Also, the writer used “could” excessively and used the word “obviously” a few times which I do not think is necessary. 
    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade:  D+
    Explanation: This paper seemed to be more of a rant than an argument. The writer lost track of the thesis and concluded the paper with a completely different idea. He/she began proclaiming that food at USC Aiken was inadequate and first year students should not be required to buy a meal plan and then concluded by encouraging vegetarian diets. Many grammatical and punctual errors were present. Some sentences did not make sense and more commas should have been used as needed. References were made and some research had been made but it did not support his/her argument which made the paper weak.

  29. Carson Weeks
    October 2, 2018 at 1:06 am

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: This paper was well put together and was very easy to understand.  The facts and explanations were right to the point and didn’t leave me confused. It had a nice flow to it and all the facts had an explanation that clearly backed up the original argument. The thesis statement was easy to point out and the paper remained well on topic. There was a lot of research done and the person used it well. Throughout the paper the person showed  how much time they put into the research and how well they applied it to the paper.

    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: For me I think this paper deserved around a B. It had an alright introduction that let me know exactly which side the reader was on and the thesis was pretty clear.  I liked how it started off with a little story because it helped me stay interested in the paper. The paragraphs were well written but most of them were not directly focused on the thesis in my opinion. For me that was the reason it got a B. It used a pretty good amount of facts and they explanations were not that bad.

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
    Explanation: The final paper I think deserves a D because it was hard to understand what the focus of the paper was.  The thesis was a little weak but was easy to find.  The first body paragraph was a little confusing but was the strongest out of the rest of the paragraphs. Felt like the paper didn’t have many actual facts to support was the person was saying

  30. Melvin Mckie
    October 2, 2018 at 3:46 am

    Paper #1“Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”Grade: AExplanation: I gave this paper a “A” because it was very understanding an everything was right on point, I did’t get off topic or nothing of that sort, an it didn’t confuse me at all. The thesis statement was very written  correctly an easy to find in the paper.  They put a lot of effort an take there time an research the topic. It was very organized, an all the facts an explanation were very detailed an right to the point. The arguments were back up for very well in this paper.

    Paper #2“The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”Grade: BExplanation:I think this paper should get a B because the thesis statement was a little clean, but the introduction was okay to me. At the begin I like the way he use creative to make a little story to make me understand what he going to talk about in the paper. I also think that some of the paragraphs were’t really on the topic towards the thesis statement to me. The facts an explanation were okay as well, but more focused on the topic.

    Paper #3“Food and You Researched Argument”Grade: DExplanation: The last paper I gave it a D because I could’t really understand what they were talking about. The thesis statement could of been better but easy to find . Some of the paragraphs were confusing , I felt like the facts an explanations weren’t really understanding , an didn’t really support what they were talking. Overall i felt like he should have put more effort an did more research.

     

     

     

  31. Brenda Martinez
    October 2, 2018 at 4:56 am

    Paper #1: Impediment of sustainability by South Carolina Government

    Grade: A

    Explanation: I think this student had an overall better research argument paper than the other two students but there are minor things they could have improved to have gotten that A+.  The student gives good examples that use logical evidence instead of opinionated biased examples. They also use proper transitions within their paragraphs and avoid repetition, as well as, supporting their paragraphs with good evidence while good citation and embedding the information was properly used. I also agree with Mikayla, Daryrl and Kendra that the student left the readers ambiguous at certain times when reading the essay.

    Paper #2: The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean

    Grade: B

    Explanation: I felt that this student extended their hook a little too much but they did a descent job at connecting it with their thesis about “passing a bottle bill on plastic bottles”. There a few grammar errors and punctuation throughout some paragraphs that occur. Also sometimes the student’s evidence isn’t supported within her paragraphs thesis, but overall they followed the requirements but could have improved their clarity and cohesiveness some more.

    Paper #3: Food and You Research Argument

    Grade: D

    Explanation: This student’s argument paper was overall ineffective at conveying their audiences point of view. Throughout this paper it can be seen the student did not put enough effort into their argument and their points were not supported by enough evidence as well as they failed to properly cite their sources correctly and embed them in their argument. This student also uses a lot of opinionated bias while jumping all over their place instead of connecting their paragraphs to their thesis. The audience reading this research argument paper would be left confused and make this student’s paper invalid and not credible.

  32. T'Meira Brown
    October 2, 2018 at 7:15 am

    Paper #1 “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: The reason I gave this paper an A and not an A+ because the paper was not perfect, it contained some errors, many of which were very minor. This paper had a very clear and thought out thesis. I was able to take away what the paper was supposed to be about. In each body paragraph the structure was concise and was followed in one. Her topic sentence portrayed what the paragraph contained and explanations/evidence was used to back up the topic sentence. Her sources were used correctly and they did not distract my reading. Her works cited was also attached to the back of the paper.

     

    Paper #2 “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B

    Explanation: This paper earned a B because it contained more errors than the first, even though they were minor they were more numerous than  the first. She had a great introduction paragraph. Her “hook” was great and she was able to connect it to the rest of the paragraph and the thesis. I was able to understand her thesis and I was able to make a connection between that and the rest of the paper. She didn’t have as many sources as the first paper but the ones she did have, supported her claim instead of take away from it. What makes this paper an B instead of an A is the complexity of her sentences/paragraphs and how developed they are. They get the point across but she could’ve gone deeper.

     

    Paper #3 “Food and Y0u Research Argument”

    Grade: D

    Explanation: This paper earned a D because it was obvious that the writer wrote this last minute. Every sentence seems rushed and it is not well thought out. There were many grammatical and mechanical errors, which took away from the paper as whole. His sources didn’t seem credible due to the fact that he didn’t use many and the way they were incorporated into the paper.  His thesis statement was not supported in the paper, it’s merely mentioned. The paper was all out confusing and very hard to follow. His sentences made little to no sense and didn’t fit into any of his paragraphs.

     

  33. Arionna Singleton
    October 2, 2018 at 8:33 am

    Paper #1 “Impediment of sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade A

    This paper is very good and it stays on topic. It was well written and it had a strong thesis statement. It was well organized and didn’t have any run on sentences.

    Paper #2  “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade B

    This paper was written properly but they didn’t make their thesis statement clear enough. I noticed a few mistakes, the paragraphs wasn’t on focus but overall the organization was clear and this paper could have been a little better.

    Paper #3 “ Food and You Research Argument”

    Grade D

    I believe this paper doesn’t have a catchy title and they didn’t get their point across. The grammar could have been a lot better. Most of the paragraphs are written poorly.

  34. Za'Leayia Robinson
    October 2, 2018 at 8:35 am

    Paper #1“Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade:A
    Explanation: I gave paper 1 an A simply because it was an great paper. It followed all of the requirements needed in the paper to be a good paper. The student didn’t get off topic and the student had cited sources within the paper with correct MLA formatting at the end with the citation page. The thesis statement was also easy to find in the essay that is another reason why it was a well written paper.
    Paper #2“The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade:C
    Explanation: I gave this paper an B because although the writer had a thesis statement they most certainly didn’t follow up with it. Being that the thesis statement wasn’t good it caused the writer to jump and change the topic throughout the whole paper which made it not worth an A.
    Paper #3 “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade:D
    Explanation: I gave this paper an D because as I began to read the paper I was already confused as to what the writer was getting at. After reading and reading the author continued to confuse me with what the paper was actually about. The citation page was not even a citation page it was just thrown together with not one MLA citation
     

  35. Ashley Metts
    October 2, 2018 at 10:16 am

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: This paper was well organized, easy to read, and had its citations laid out. I gave this paper a B, because it was well organized, although it still needed some work in some other areas.
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: This paper has a very good first sentence and really grabs the readers attention. And this first sentence is relatable it is not just a question that gets our attention. the rest of the paper is well laid out, and well put together.
    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
    Explanation: This paper has a lot of grammar issues, at the end the citations are not in MLA as well as the structure itself is poorly put together.
     

  36. Ryan Arnott
    October 2, 2018 at 10:40 am

    Paper 1
    Grade: B+
    Explanation: while it is a good paper overall, there are some minor errors that pull it out from the A grade range. It feels like the sources drive the idea of the paper more that the writer does, that they are very numerous and used often that it feels like the writer’s own ideas don’t show through as much. The writer did have a clear argument and it is a good paper, however it relies too heavily upon the sources to do the bulk of the work instead of using them to support their idea.
     
    Paper 2
    Grade: C
    Explanation: The thesis is weak and doesn’t even really seem like a true thesis at a first look. The following two paragraphs focus on the big picture before moving onto its subject, South Carolina. Throughout the entire essay, the writer doesn’t stay focused on South Carolina but moves between different focuses, which would help if their argument was for a national law but not just one for South Carolina. Overall, its an essay that can be focused more on its subject and have a more clear thesis.
     
    Paper 3
    Grade:F
    Explanation: There is no clear thesis statement in the first paragraph nor throughout the essay. A few grammar mistakes that make the flow of sentences awkward. The sources are not cited correctly, in fact, in text citations do not appear anywhere in the essay. Argument is not research backed, and overall lacks any focal point.
     

  37. Austin Williams
    October 2, 2018 at 11:11 am

    Paper #1

    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    Explanation: This was super good! The thesis on this paper was awesome! her argument point was valid and she knew what she was talking about! She had very nice grammar and organization of the essay.

     

    Paper #2

    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B+

    Explanation: I loved how the writer started off with a funny introduction that relates to the reader. Her citations are done very well in the paragraphs. I also liked how the writer did their sources too.

     

    Paper #3

    “Food and You Researched Argument”

    Grade: D-

    Explanation: Obviously the writer was doing this paper on their phone. This essay needs a lot of work because it was just awful. The grammar they use is not good, the sources/citations were not good, and it was very biased!

  38. Airyhana Brown
    October 2, 2018 at 12:08 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade:A-
    Explanation:Structually correct and written very well. This writer used citations and showed evidence for each claim they made. Their claim was clear and their paper overall was very organized. If the thesis went more in depth I’d give it an A+

    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B-
    Explanation: This paper is structured very well and stays on topic, but overall writing is choppy. The writer doesn’t clarify their reasoning throughout the paper, and their claim isn’t supported.Their thesis could’ve been more in depth, but overall the paper was good. It was very clear and organized

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D-
    Explanation:Their transitions are abrupt and uneasy. I’m not sure exactly what their thesis is supposed to be or what the writer is leaning towards. The writer is very biased throughout this paper. There isn’t much research. This paper is mostly based on opinions. There are no in text citations and the writing skills throughout are very minimal. Overall the paper could use some reediting.

  39. Keezee Florentville
    October 2, 2018 at 12:56 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A+
    Explanation: This paper is very enthralling and well-written. The writer gave examples to strengthen her claims and provided the reasoning behind some of the terms used. Citations were provided throughout this paper, to allow the reader to have an idea as to where the information was obtained. The writer’s writing skills are exemplary, and the use of grammar and punctuation are spot on. This paper was easy to understand, and the points used were stated clearly. This paper deserves an A+ and the writing skills epitomize this.
     
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: This paper was written fairly well and some claims were supported with logical evidence to make an effective argument. During the reading of this paper, I got confused a few times as to what the writer was trying to portray. In my opinion, the citations were not done well, which resulted in a few numbers being placed to the end of sentences which can confuse readers. The organization was clear for the most part, but most of the information could have been written in more detail.
     
    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: F
    Explanation: The information in this paper was not researched but is based on the writer’s opinion. The structure of the paper was poorly constructed and is not very organized. The paragraphs were unclear, the writing skills expressed is basic and the information is not stated clearly. I was unable to locate the thesis statement which means that it was either not present or not stated clearly. The citations provided were not concise which made the paper really confusing.
     
     

  40. Joseph Dixon
    October 2, 2018 at 1:05 pm

    Paper #1

    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade:A

    Explanation: The paper was very well written. The argument that develops is clear and concise, the format and layout is easy to understand and isn’t all over the place. Throughout the paper everything is backed up with sufficient evidence that is well developed. Overall the paper is well written but it could be better on some points, a few of the sentences throughout the paper are off topic and don’t necessarily go along with the general idea each of the specific paragraphs tries to present.

     

    Paper #2

    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B-

    Explanation: I think the paper deserved the B- because of the few but obvious mistakes it has. When first looking at the paper you realize that there is no header, nor name, it also doesn’t have anything to describe what class it is for or a class description. The paper itself isn’t bad but there are one or two citation errors that weren’t cited at all but after the few mistakes the rest of the paper has proper citation and good arguments. The final paragraph i felt could have dropped one of the useless sentences that just made the conclusion seem kind of dragged out and long.

     

     

    Paper #3

    “Food and You Researched Argument”

    Grade:D-

    Explanation: Similar to the second paper the header and information in the top left are completely missing. the formatting is all over the place, and the reference page and conclusion are wrong and heavily lacking. The grammatical errors are completely unchecked almost as if the author didn’t read over it at all. How ever where the paper is  lacking they do have a few things that are well done such as the citation which was almost perfectly cited throughout also the paper wasn’t short which was the problem with the second paper we read. The final thing the paper had going for it was the fact that the paper was able to back up its argument with good citation and accurate facts.

  41. Anna Bevington
    October 2, 2018 at 6:32 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: B
    Explanation:
     Student has no interesting hook, and does not have a strong thesis statement. They also do not support their thesis with their body paragraphs and are sort of all over the place. Though there isn’t a main focal point, the student does use sophisticated language and many resources to support the claims made. Is written in proper MLA format with work cited.
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: A
    Explanation:
     Thorough, well written introduction and uses sophisticated language without sounding stiff or boring. Has a clear thesis and follows suit throughout her body paragraphs. Forms reliable arguments with the claims made and includes sources all throughout. Did not properly format paper in MLA format, but did properly cite sources in MLA format.

    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
    Explanation:

     Attempts to use sophisticated language but it sounds forced. Thesis statement makes a claim with nothing to back it up. Not well organized at all. Uses “I” a lot for a college paper. You don’t need to say “I think” because if you write it, you obviously think it. Made no effort to come up with a proper title. Not in proper MLA format, and the cited sources aren’t even close to being in the correct format.

  42. saba alyahya
    October 2, 2018 at 7:38 pm

    Paper 01: Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government
    Grade: +A
    Explanation
    The paper is very well written through the end and every part of the paper is well organised. It is clear from the paper that the writer have put a lot of effort conducting research for that topic. The thesis statement of the paper is very clear and straight forward letting the readers know clearly about the intention of the paper. The writer uses the citations where necessary to let the readers know about the source of the information. The language used throughout the paper was formal and suitable which shows that the writer is an educated person. The arguments made by the writer were supported by proper logics and proofs. The most important thing is that the writer added statistics to support her claims. For this effort the writer deserves a +A for this paper.
     
    Paper 02: The Plastic Soup we Call Ocean
    Grade: B
    Explanation: 
    In paper number 02, I really liked the introduction of the paper because it makes you interested in the topic telling you different things. The thesis statement is not very clear and strong. I think the thesis statement can be made stronger. Moreover, the evidence to support the claims were good but the writer could have used much stronger evidences to support the claim. Moreover, there was a lack of logical evidences to support most of the claims. The paper was cited thoroughly but the writer is switching from one concept to other concept abruptly which make it confusing for me to understand. At some places, the writer suddenly strays from the topic to some other thing. The grammar and vocabulary of the paper can be improved. The paper was organised neatly which makes the reader understand about the purpose of paper. The writer definitely put some effort in the paper but I think many things related to this paper can be improved.
     
    Paper 03: Food and You Researched Argument
    Grade: D
    Explanation: 
    From the start, this paper doesn’t attract its readers. The thesis statement of the paper was not present overall. The organization of the paper was extremely disturbed which make it difficult to understand. I think this paper was more like a reflection about how the writer feels about the topic rather than a research paper. The writer didn’t conducted any proper research for the paper. The citations of the paper were not according to MLA format. The writer just used the links of the site and pasted them in the citations section. The length of the paragraphs is disturbing and the grammar and vocabulary is not very formal.

  43. Andrea Blackwood
    October 3, 2018 at 7:25 pm

    Paper #1: “Impediment of  Sustainability by South Carolina Government”

    Grade: A

    This essay was the best one out of the three I read. Everything was very clear and well organized. The use of the quotations was a good source for evidence to back up the students point.

    Paper #2: “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”

    Grade: B

    This essay was also good as well. To me there was something missing, or it was just the lack of staying on topic. Besides that the thesis was a great starter and the organization throughout the paper was great too.

    Paper #3:”Food and Your Researched Argument

    Grade: D-

    I agree with Adeline on this one because the student did use “I” a lot in the first paragraph. The paper  was more opinionated than actually having facts to back up his side of the argument. While reading this one I got a little confused and that’s why I gave it a D-.

  44. Candace Crowder
    October 6, 2018 at 4:22 pm

    Paper #1: Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government

    Grade: A-

    Explanation: In my opinion, this essay was very well written and very easy to read and understand. The writer had little to no mistakes in this essay and was very sourceful when giving out information.

    Paper #2: The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean

    Grade: B+

    Explanation: This paper had some mistakes throughout the essay. One of the good things about this paper was the writer’s thesis statement, it really stood out. The writer had a little problem on the MLA Format and didn’t follow through with it correctly. But overall it was also a well written paper but had more mistakes including punctuation and paragraph rumbles.

    Paper #3: Food and You Research Argument

    Grade: D-

    Explanation: This essay seemed like it was written the night before it was due. It was the worst essay I have ever read. The title to me didn’t even make sense.  There was mistakes including punctuation, grammar, thesis statements, paragraphs, MLA citations, and etc.

     

     

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  45. Chloe Corley
    October 15, 2018 at 2:27 pm

    Paper #1
    “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government”
    Grade: A
    Explanation: Paper 1 is very well written and fully supports the claims that they chose for their argument using logical appeals. The writer used excellent citations to support their claims as well and cited them right. The organization of the paper was very good and so was the voice of it. I feel like the thesis statement could have gone in more in depth but other than that, this paper was very well written.
     
    Paper #2
    “The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean”
    Grade: B
    Explanation: The thesis statement in paper 2 was very good, but the introduction didn’t really get my attention like it should. Throughout the paper, I felt as if some of the paragraphs weren’t really on the topic that he talked about in the thesis statement. The explanations were somewhat okay too, they just needed to focus more on the topic and back it up.
     
     
    Paper #3
    “Food and You Researched Argument”
    Grade: D
    Explanation: In the introduction, once again, it doesn’t have the eye-catching introduction like it should. It just didn’t catch my attention. The grammar is poor and only cited all but one source wrong. The author uses his own opinion to back up his argument and pretty much fails to back up that information.

  46. Rhyan Faile
    October 15, 2018 at 7:10 pm

    Paper #1

    This paper is very well written. It flows very well and well organized. The sources are cited correctly and are used correctly. The purpose of the paper was clearly stated and it was an overall, very well written paper. I would give this paper an A-, simply for the little bit of a lack of depth on the stated topic.

    Paper #2

    This paper was a decent one. It lacked some depth and also tended to stray form the subject. Also the introduction was lacking and the paper didn’t flow as well as it could have. I would grade this paper as a low B.

    Paper #3

    This paper is poorly written and is not clear on many levels. The introduction is lacking and the whole paper is the authors opinion and it does not contribute much to the integrity of the paper. I would give this paper a D.

  47. Sydney Burk
    October 15, 2018 at 11:48 pm

    Paper 1: “Impediment of Sustainability by South Carolina Government” 

    Grade: B 

    Explanation: This paper is very well written and informative to the reader. In some cases, the text strays from what the paper is supposed to be written about. It is evident that the writer did a great deal of research on the topic and the thesis is spot on to the topic of discussion. 

    Paper 2: ”The Plastic Soup We Call Ocean” 

    Grade: A 

    Explanation: The paper is very well writing and straight to the point. It does not use an excessive amount of detail that would bore the reader in a sense. The paper is put together very well, and the information was helpful to the reader. The writer had effective and clear evidence to his claims.  

    Paper 3: ”Food and You Research Argument” 

    Grade: D 

    Explanation: This paper did not have clear evidence to support his topic of discussion. The paper seemed like an opinion rather than a research paper, which made it hard to be informed by what he was saying. The writer didn’t clearly get their point across from the beginning, so it made the paper confusing for the reader.

  48. Helena Riddle
    October 16, 2018 at 1:30 am

    Paper #1:

    Grade: A+

    I decided to give the first paper an A+ because, this paper was written very well. This paper flowed smoothly unlike the others.

    Paper #2:

    Grade: B

    This paper I feel received a B mainly because, the thesis was very well written. but the rest of the paragraphs we focused on one thing.

    Paper #3:

    Grade: D-

    This paper was very well close to an F because, the paper was unorganized. It had very poor punctuation and grammar.

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